Great advice from Dan
A Quick Dialog Exercise
Periodically, I take an example from my critique group, change the names of the characters to avoid making the author uncomfortable, and us it as a demonstration of stuff we don’t see ourselves that other might. Here is an example of something I have accidentally done a LOT of, and how to correct it.
Read the following short passage. (The girlfriend has been watching her boyfriend dance while he cooked, and then they sit down to dinner.)
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“So apart from skiving off today, how’s uni going?”
“It feels like a huge backward step. I’d prefer to be back at work.” She poured two glasses of water. “Have you won any more contracts?”
“I have actually. Remember the urgent sample screenshots you pulled together just before you left?”
She surprised herself at being able to remember anything about those last few weeks. “Was it that catalogue…
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